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On fields of thoughts I dream and lie
And jilted stars swiftly descend
To lowly heights that never end,
While breaking webs of past remain.

But gentle guilts are born again
Of sweet and bitter, cold mistakes
That shiver in torment and aches
Of old, imprisoned stars still shake.

And thus the only stars that make
The light of life, flicker in fear
Then turn grotesque and with a tear,
On fields of thoughts I dream and die.
:iconnephele99:
Just a poem I made in the first day of this year...
I hope you can tell me what you think of it and point out any language mistakes, critiques are very welcome :D
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~rothus66 Feb 13, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Really great poem and the imagery you create is beautiful.
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:iconnephele99:
Thanks for the comment and fave ^_^
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~tommyboywood Jan 7, 2013  Professional Writer
interesting. I'm guessing it's about a troubled conscience, or past regrets? hmmm...
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